Home The Author The Book Reviews FAQs More Stuff The Other Side


RSS Feed 

Tuesday, April 24, 2007



Let me tell you a story:

Harold, a small, weaselly man with bad skin, leaves his dingy apartment to go for a walk. His wife stays behind, snoring in a bed with dirty sheets; Harold never loved her, but married her because he had to marry someone. She didn't love him either, but married him because she was too plain to get anyone else; in fact, she's having an affair with the delivery boy from the local grocery store, who drops off wilted vegetables and rank cheese every Thursday, and then has strenuous, grunting sex with her on the ratty living room rug. He has bad teeth and halitosis, but he also has a large and ever-ready penis, so Mavis, Harold's wife, keeps shagging him, though she usually fakes orgasm because nothing much gets her going. Anyway, Harold heads off to work, passing the fat, sour-faced crossing guard Martha en route, and arrives at the door of his company, a boring place that sells badly-manufactured radio parts, where he does a pointless job for an ugly and irritating boss...

Have you had enough of this story yet? Because I have.

It's a surprisingly common mistake in inexperienced writers to produce fiction that's unrelentingly negative. 'There's no fiction without friction', as a writing teacher of mine used to say, and that means putting some conflict in: if Harold skipped down the street and nothing went wrong all day, it would be an uneventful story. But there's such a thing as putting in hostility just to give your characters something to do - and that's not a good idea. It feels forced; without sound justification for the negative feelings you're writing about, then you have characters who are just pissy, which is no fun to read. Ceaseless griping is no substitute for interesting storytelling.

There's another reason why inexperienced writers do this, though, and it has to do with timing. Basically, it's quicker to read a book than to write one. It's possible to read a book in a single session if you have some free hours, but you can't write a book at a sitting. You can only spend a few hours on it at a time, and then you go and do something else. As a result, the mood of the book is not as constant for a writer as for a reader. You can write scene after scene with exactly the same feel without it becoming monotonous for you, because in between these scenes, you do other things. But if other things don't happen between them in the book, the reader gets nothing but the same thing, over and over. Hence, a writer going for a striking mood may decide to get the reader's attention with little character sketches that focus on flaws, without realising that they've accidentally strayed into Hateland, and produced a book where every single character is ugly, incompetent, morally bankrupt, stinky, stupid, or all of the above. It gives the reader a headache to read, but it's perfectly possible that the writer hasn't noticed.

It's not just the monotony that makes this a problem, it's the implausibility. Nothing and nobody is all bad. Some stories have villains who are entirely evil, and while it's crude and not particularly realistic, it can serve a narrative function - but such villains are offset with nice people. It's hard to care about a world where everything is awful; you just don't want to be there, and it also doesn't seem real. Try this:

Harold, leaves his apartment to go for a walk. His wife stays behind, asleep in bed. Harold and Mavis had fun when they first married, but the spark has gone out of things a bit, and while each would like more attention and praise from the other one, they're both too tired to make the first move. Mavis didn't mean to become this kind of woman, but when the grocery boy started flirting with her, even though she hadn't fancied him much to begin with, it was so nice feeling young and desirable again that she ended up flirting back. Now they're having sex when Harold is out, and even though the boy needs to get his teeth straightened and they don't talk much, he seems to want her, which, after years of Harold being so used to her, is too much to resist. Anyway, Harold heads off to work, stopping briefly to say 'good morning' to the crossing guard, Martha, who's been there as long as he can remember. Martha's doctor had told her she needs to lose weight, but she loves to eat too much to listen to him; she has an endless fund of anecdotes she tells in the pub every night and a nickname for every child she shepherds over the road. Harold arrives at the door of his company, where he's done the same job for ten years; it's not exactly stimulating, but he's used to it, and has learned to laugh at the boss's bad jokes because the man is trying to be entertaining and there's no harm in being polite.

It's the same story, but if you cut everyone a bit of slack, not only does it make it more bearable to read, but it gives much more possibilities for character development. In version 1, when Martha discovers that Mavis is sleeping with the delivery boy, her sour nature is obviously going to lead to disapproval, and either blackmail or spitefully telling Harold, who's going to be pissed off with his wife - but as he was pissed off to begin with, we're probably going to end where we've started. Martha as well: she's a sour woman, so discovering an affair is just going to confirm her view of things. Stasis. In version 2, you have a fragile and disillusioned marriage, more subject to change; because Martha is basically an optimist, the discovery is going to surprise her, put her in a conflict where, because she's not a sour cow, she's going to feel empathy for more than one person and have a variety of choices to take. The ending, in short, can be much more interesting, because you haven't trapped yourself in a single emotion in the set-up.

Different readers can swallow different levels of negativity, of course; I can think of some very successful writers who have an extremely negative tone. But as a general principle, it's monotonous to have everything be bad, and it's careless not to check over your work to see if you've fallen into that trap. And if you want your characters to have intense feelings, give them a reason. A good one. There's no point bringing more hatred into this world than it has already, after all, and a bit of compassion is an essential quality if you want to write good characters. If characters feel things without good reason, they'll do things without good reason, and that's not a good story. Cut everyone some slack, and you'll find you have much more room to manoeuvre.

Of course relentless positivity can be very wearing too. If everyone in your story is extraordinarily gorgeous, kind and fragrant you end up with, well, Elves. Even one 'perfect' character can cause reading nausea, unless it's satirical.
In fiction I find I the tone I most enjoy a sort of energetic positivity undercut with realism and darkness. Is there a word for that? I haven't found one yet.
Well, on balance, I have to say I preferred the first version. They were so bad we were getting to some fun black comedy there, which is nice and easy to digest, whereas in the second version I became emotionally involved, when in actual fact I just happen to feel like a bit of black humour right now. Funny how the reader's mood can affect how he/she reacts.
You'd need the second version if you want to spin a full-length novel out of it, but the first version would make a good, very bitter short story...
I'm with chris - let's hear the rest of that nighmare-ish, twisted, grotesque short story!
Yes, sustainability is definitely an issue. Simon Crump released a short story collection called 'My Elvis Blackout' which was a series of increasingly surreal vignettes about Elvis with in some places quite a nasty undercurrent, but the brevity and surrealism redeemed it. On the basis of this I bought 'Monkey's Birthday', which comprised two novellas of such dispiriting nastiness that I'm looking forward to forgetting them in my declining years. Of course, that may have been the point.
I preferred the first one as well. I also didn't think it said very much that was negative about the characters. It was mostly negative about their lives. So in that respect it seemed to be cutting them slack. I very much related to the sad idea of having sex with someone who is ugly and repulsive simply because their penis is big even though you aren't even interested in sex. That was a million painful heartbreaks in one or two sentences.

The second one may be the more sustainable one (and in general I agree with your general argument anyway, books need to shift between moods or they become monotonous, though those moods need not be happy ones just different ones) but I still think the first one could be sustained and developed and made to be pretty funny and sad in a long book.

Mind you this might be the flaw in the examples, your instincts as a writer have led to you writing two good pieces rather than a bad one and a good one.
There's no way I would read the first one :).

What I really like about writers like UK LeGuin and Connie Willis, apart from the general quality of their writing, is the compassion that shines through. I don't like writing that hates the characters or despises the reader. I'm constantly amazed at the amount of slush I see which has wholly dislikeable characters bent on mindless self-destruction. No doubt somebody wants to read that stuff--after all, there must be so much of it for a reason, right?--but it ain't me.
I totally agree with you buffy squirrel on the Ursula Le Guin front. The Dispossed is one of mu favourite books. But I don't think the first extract hated its characters. At least thats not how I felt it was.

I don't think anyone really reads books where they don't like something about the characters. It's just we all like different things in characters maybe. I am also not convinced that any writer deep down despises any character they write. Or maybe I mean any good writer. Because to write a believeable character you have to empathise with them on some level.

I quite like reading stuff that really despises the reader, but it has to be in an extreme way rather than a casual way.
Post a comment

<< Home


July 2006   August 2006   September 2006   October 2006   November 2006   December 2006   January 2007   February 2007   March 2007   April 2007   May 2007   June 2007   July 2007   August 2007   September 2007   October 2007   November 2007   December 2007   January 2008   February 2008   March 2008   April 2008   May 2008   June 2008   July 2008   August 2008   September 2008   October 2008   November 2008   December 2008   January 2009   February 2009   March 2009   April 2009   May 2009   June 2009   July 2009   August 2009   September 2009   October 2009   November 2009   December 2009   January 2010   February 2010   March 2010   April 2010   June 2010   July 2010   August 2010   September 2010   October 2010   November 2010   December 2010   January 2011   February 2011   March 2011   April 2011   May 2011   June 2011   July 2011   August 2011   September 2011   October 2011   November 2011   December 2011   January 2012   February 2012   March 2012   April 2012   May 2012   June 2012   July 2012   August 2012   September 2012   October 2012   November 2012   December 2012   January 2013   February 2013   March 2013   April 2013   May 2013   June 2013   July 2013   August 2013   September 2013   October 2013   March 2014  

This page is powered by Blogger. Isn't yours?